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After some thought Fluttershy nodded and left her house, heading for Discord's hiding spot.

"Umm, Discord, can you come with me for a sec?" Fluttershy stepped into the Everfree forest. Discord's eyes shone in the darkness as he looked at her before getting up and moving towards her. Curious, he asked, "Where?"

"Just over there," Fluttershy pointed to her garden. Discord froze then moved back, "Oh no, no, no. I'm not going anywhere near any type of civilization. Nu uh. Not to mention your friends are just inside, aren't they?"

Fluttershy looked at him with her big, pleading eyes.

"Ugh. Fine," Discord groaned and he followed her to the small bridge that passes over her river. They stopped and Discord sat himself down quite comfortably on the bridge. Different thoughts were flying through his head. Why did he let himself come here? Wouldn't the others see him? How would they react?


Discord snapped back to reality at the sound of Fluttershy's voice, "Hm?"

"You have to promise me something."

"Oh do I now?"

"I want you to promise that you won't run, hide, and most importantly, won't attack," Fluttershy gave him an uncertain look, "And just...stay."

"Fluttershy," Discord raised a brow at her, "I'm not a dog."

Fluttershy giggled, "I know. Sorry," she trotted off inside.

Discord's heart was pounding and the same questions as before returned. He crouched down, staring down the path Fluttershy had just used to take her to her house in apprehension.

After several minutes Fluttershy came back outside, followed by Twilight, Applejack, Rarity, Pinkie and Rainbow Dash flying grumpily behind them, arms still folded. Discord reared up and let out a deep rumble from his chest. The rumble reached the ponies' ears and they froze.

Fluttershy moved forward, "Shh. It's okay. Calm down."

Discord ignored her and growled even harder.

"Please?" Fluttershy tried again. He stopped growling almost immediately and looked at Fluttershy while the others just gawked at him.

"Perhaps you should stop staring at him..." Fluttershy pointed out.

"Oh, right, sorry," most of them closed their mouths, but Applejack had to reach over and shut Pinkie's for her.

Rainbow Dash rolled her eyes and mumbled, "You do know this is just a waste of time..."

"Discord..." Twilight stated, "What are you doing back here?" she stepped forward. Discord hesitated, ""

There was a long silence.

"Apologize," Fluttershy finished the sentence for him, knowing how frightened he must be.

"Hmph. Yeah. Like that's gonna make up for the two destructions of Ponyville," Rainbow grumbled.

"Rainbow dear, give him a chance," Rarity spoke. Rainbow face hooved "He's already had too many chances!"

Discord shifted back slightly, getting ready to run if he ever needed to.

"Hey, hey...Discord. We're not going to hurt you," Fluttershy placed a hoof on his shoulder, comforting him.

Discord looked at her again, then at the others. He dropped his head, "Right. Let's get this over and done with," he plonked himself down, awaiting any questions or statements but only expecting more scowling and arguing.

Suddenly, Pinkie stepped forward, yelling, "WHEN DO WE GET CHOCOLATE RAIN?!"

Discord was surprised by the question. He stared at Pinkie with wide eyes then he smiled awkwardly, "Uhh...maybe later."

"Okie dokey lokie!" Pinkie finally settled on the subject for the first time. The others were relieved, as she was complaining the whole time about not having any chocolate rain.

"Ah don't suppose you have any of those tricky little ideas behind them eyes do ya?" Apple Jack questioned.

"No. Of course not," Discord answered.

"What do you mean, 'of course' not? It's not like you never did," Rarity pointed out.

Discord sighed. "Look, I know that it seems very likely for me to be scheming and lying, but that was before. You have no idea how terrible I feel when I look back now."


"Rainbow!" Twilight spat back.

Discord had had enough of Rainbow's complaints. They were really ticking him off. He stood up quickly and stormed over to Rainbow, who finally unfolded her arms and began moving back in fright. Discord stopped moving as soon as he was nose to nose with her. He glared deep into her eyes, creating panic in her mind.
"LOOK!" he yelled, not caring if he hurt anypony's ears, "YOU SHOULD CONSIDER YOURSELF LUCKY! AT LEAST YOU HAVE THEM!" he pointed to where Rainbow's friends were standing in surprise, "I KNOW YOU DON'T TRUST ME! I KNOW NONE OF YOU TRUST ME! GUESS WHAT?! I DON'T TRUST YOU EITHER! I DON'T EVEN KNOW IF I CAN TRUST FLUTTERSHY YET! AND HECK! SHE'S THE ONE THAT'S BEEN HELPING ME! YOU HAVE EACH OTHER!" He turned to the rest of them, "BUT ME?! I have NOPONY!" Discord whipped around, smacking his tail into Rainbow Dash's face as he flew off.

Everypony stared in shock at Discord as he disappeared into the shadows of the forest. After the moment had passed, Fluttershy turned to the other ponies, "Can you not tell anypony he's here? I want you to promise me."

Fluttershy's friends looked at her for several long moments before each nodding and did a pinkie promise.

"Thank you," she quietly said in relief as she watched them turn around to go back to their homes.
CHAPTA FAH'VE!!! OH YEE! lol. soz. mental breakout. ^^

So... Discord actually hit Rainbow dash... That was nice of him, don't ya think? <-- add sarcasm there)


Hey guys, just wonderin'... would any of you have the time to leave a lil' critique? you don't have to if ya don't wanna, but I just wanna know if there's anything i can fix up. I want this Fan Fic to have my full potential in it. I already know the chapters are pretty short, but ohwellz. X3 I can do short chapter coz' I can!

Characters (C) Lauren Faust
Story (C) Me
Edited by :iconsada-pazaki:
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LilMissMusicGirl96 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this story so far! Good job! My only complaint is that whenever someone is yelling (especially Rainbow Dash, since she's normally loud), it's in all caps. There are other ways to convey anger and yelling. :)
hollow-whispers Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah, this story is a few years old now. I've polished up my grammar since then, and I'd edit it, but I just don't feel it'd be worth it. :shrug:
LilMissMusicGirl96 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, I enjoyed it. I'm glad you wrote it! :D
titanicdragon Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014
poor Discord
KeidranGirl Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Student Artist
TheKillerShaymim Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
Someone get this over to Equestria Daily! STAT!
hollow-whispers Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I wish. :3
invaderzimfan234 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i was wondering when he'd break.

critique? I-i can't....:icondashshrugplz:
strangeanimal08 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I read it over twice trying to find something to criticize but in all honesty it reads very well. I think you've managed to capture each ponies personality (especially Rainbow; I can totally see her being the only one to be outspoken towards Discord). And even with keeping their traits from the show, you manage to incorporate an individualized, more fan-based writing style. It doesn't sound pretentious nor does it sound too childish (considering it's based off of a children's show, that's quite impressive haha). Sorry, that wasn't much help was it >.<
hollow-whispers Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
lol X3 thank you kindly ^^
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